Monday, 8 November 2010

Microfiction

Come away, said the trees.
Come away into the dance, away
from pain, from suffering.
The child listened,
the child went
into the woods.
Away.

13 comments:

evenstarwen said...

Chilling! Like a dark fairytale. Love it.

Sylvia K said...

Ooooh!! It does sound like a dark, mysterious fairytale and I love it, too!! Terrific take on the pic of the day! Hope you have a wonderful week!

Sylvia

libithina said...

the fairies will do that ~ get you every time but fun will be had with leaves kicking fall ~ great take ~ Lib

dkzody said...

Very well written. Makes you want to hear more, which any good story should do.

Pat said...

Evocative, sad, poignant. Excellent poetic writing!

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

Excellent MF! It hints at magic and faeries and something perhaps sinister. Very evocative.

septembermom said...

This does seem mystical and fairy like. Wonderfully done :)

Diane said...

Beautiful and scary at the same time.... :O)

Michael G-G said...

I particularly like the "come away into the dance" line. A gorgeously eerie poem.

Have a great week.

hope said...

Hmmm, has a haunting song like quality to it.

faith said...

Maybe there's nothing dark - maybe it's just a girl allowing nature to heal.

Susan Fobes said...

Excellent poem-sad as well...

sylviamorice said...

Very dark...just my kind of story. Loved it!
Have a great week. Cheers.